Dividing lines are there for people who are not on the edge. — Eric Ammadon

Page 89

Page 89

A ton of things keeping me busy right now…but I’m glad I got this page looking good. I’m learning a lot about drawing explosions.

↓ Transcript
Msaka: Keeba, come get us now!
Girii: Oh my God Oh my God Oh my God
Jacob: Stay together! Keep running!
Roger: Look!
Msaka: Keeba!
Jacob: Don't stop running. They're still falling!

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Discussion (12)¬

  1. Skur says:

    Considering your rather scarce use of sound effects, I cannot help but find this amusing. It’s so very…comic after all.

    Heh, how is the comic turning out for you? Did you expect/hope for more or less traffic? What audience did you expect?

    Maybe some what-the-artist-thought-while-doing-it can give new insight on the story, once you’ve got the time.

  2. dermiste says:

    Great job on the layout, it reflects very well the chaotic situations our friends are in without impairing readability.

    I really like the direction your art is taking, keep up the great work !

  3. Rahka says:

    Poor Keeba.

  4. Remus Shepherd says:

    Yes, poor Keeba. I did warn you the body count is going up soon.

    I use sound effects all the time. Jacob’s gun goes ‘zacrack’ in chapter two, and the same font effects used on this page were used in the missile explosion in chapter three. I think you’re just noticing it now because there are three of them on one page.

    The comic is doing well. Traffic is double what Indefensible Positions had, which is encouraging. And I’ve only done one ad campaign. The second will be starting soon. But I expect the big influx of readers will happen when the first book is done and for sale. I have big plans then.

  5. Jacek says:

    Oh My God! They Killed Keeba!

  6. Remus Shepherd says:

    Those bastards! 🙂

  7. Skur says:

    We might have different standards. You use one every five pages or so. Other comics would have used on this page:
    A “beep” for the comm. in her hat.
    A “strututut” for the (I assume running) car.
    A “vroom” for the downfalling plane.

    That’s what I mean by scarce. You don’t flesh out a soundscape (as often-consumed comics as Marvels/Mangas usually do) but highlight only single noises when there’s little dialogue around. And that is more background. Thus the story has less exaggerated (=un-comic) tone in general (aided by the b/w), then it’s a bigger contrast when this more classical comic (cartoonish) things like huge topic-of-the-panel explosions with a “BA-DOOM” are brought into the readers focus.
    Is that intelligible? It’s a very un-noisy comic and it’s always striking when there’s such a prominent noise. (It was too back with the missiles.)

  8. Skur says:

    ps.: Is that fist in the first panel intentional?

  9. Remus Shepherd says:

    Fist? I didn’t intend to put a fist in, no. I guess the mushroom cloud looks a little like one, if that’s what you mean.

  10. Hirosjimma says:

    what pilot is going to get a traffic ticket? :p
    it’s a (an?) uav

  11. Remus Shepherd says:

    I modeled that plane off of a futuristic-looking modern private jet. UAVs don’t have taxi lights, as far I know.

    Just ignore the alternate text jokes if they’re not working for you. The comic has been written many pages in advance, but I don’t think of an alternate text joke until I post each page…and I haven’t felt very humorous lately. My dog and friend of 16 years is dying and I’ll have to put him down soon. I’m trying not to think about it.

    (This might qualify as yet another example of my killing a character in the comic and someone dying in real life. I’m trying not to think about that either.)

  12. Sonja says:

    Oh, poor Keeba!

    And I’m very sorry for your dog. It’s always hard to lose a pet you have loved and lived with for so long.